Global Haiku Tradition Tan-Renga 2017
burnt pie though I'd rather the pie by Lucas Chatterton & Benjamin Maynard burnt pie bills left unpaid by Lucas Chatterton & Georgia Martindale I liked this tan-renga because in the first three lines it makes it seem as if the person is just trying to look on the bright side of everything and just be happy that they are together with their family. Then all of a sudden the power shuts off because the bills weren't paid and they were left to eat in the dark. At this point I imagine that it was hard to stay upbeat and look on the positive side of things as their power was just shut off. I imagine a family that is happy to be together becomes upset all of a sudden when they find out they have to eat in the dark. Overall, I just really liked this tan-renga. Ben |
day at the zoo ammunition in hand by Alex Herrera What I like about this tan renga is the continuation that the second author had with the original haiku. I like how the perspective changes from an overall view of the monkeys plotting their plan, to the actual thoughts of a monkey participating it. I just automatically go into the monkey’s mind and I feel like I now know what they exactly are planning to do against the visitors. I thought it was fun and had a humorous tone to it. Kalli First thanksgiving in years Going back to that one night by Alex Pratt & Mia Klek |
a goldfish floats the little baby goldfish by Georgia Martindale & Kalli Farmer he opens his eyes wondering when by Trey DeLuna & Benjamin Maynard |
the hopeful dog Grandpa Joe limps in by Maya Dougherty & Austin Taylor the hopeful dog he spots the steaming bacon by Maya Dougherty & Georgia Martindale I really liked the added lines to this haiku, because they add an element of humor. Before, the original haiku was more observational, and didn’t comment on the thoughts of the dog. The added lines suggest that the dog loves bacon, and makes the conscious decision to go for it and risk getting in trouble. I also like the rhythm of the two lines. I think they go well with the original haiku. Lane |
In the corner A quick blink by Mia Klek & Alex Pratt I enjoyed this Tan-Renga because it was something that I think a lot of people could relate to. I think that this not only applies to childhood like in the haiku, but to all ages. It seems like time flies by in the blink of an eye and thats why I liked this Tan-Renga. Alex P. key to the gate little boys by Alex Herrera & Lucas Chatterton |
looking at the shelf back to solitaire by Alex Pratt & Lucas Chatterton lying standing by Trey DeLuna & Mia Klek This was my favorite tan-renga. I like to think of it as the haiku and the link are the two different perspectives of the broken relationship. One person is probably handling the break up very badly, unable to do anything but lay in bed and cry. The other person is trying hard to keep themselves distracted from it by going about their lives as usual, but they keep noticing little things that are missing now, like having their hand to hold. I also like the fact that both perspectives are sad, rather than just one person being sad and the other being perfectly okay. It makes me think that they broke up because of something circumstantial, rather than lost feelings, which in some ways is even sadder. Maya |
Middle of my prayer Just the answer by Kalli Farmer & Alex Pratt This is my favorite tan renga because it is hopeful. This chain fits together very well. I like how it starts in the haiku by making an observation and the chain continues to explain what the person is thinking when this happens. I also enjoyed this because I have been performing in vespers this week and like this chain, it is helping me remember to appreciate life and to have hope. Georgia This way my favorite Tan-Renga because I just really relate to the content. I have never been super religious, but I have still do believe. Sometimes I don't deal well with the indirectness of how it all works and I always have a lot of questions. I always want more answers than something like that allows, so if I did find myself praying, I'd be looking for signs or something as a type of signal and I like that about this poem. Lucas midnight quietness the black paw twitches by Kalli Farmer & Maya Dougherty
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old brick sidewalk beating the odds by Lucas Chatterton old brick sidewalk old childhood memories by Lucas Chatterton & Benjamin Maynard |
playground little kids giggle by Kalli Farmer & Austin Taylor playground a frog by Kalli Farmer & Alex Herrera I really like this tan-renga from Kalli and Alex. I like how the perspectives of both parts are animals. I think the haiku is kind of cute and would be good for a little kids. I can imagine an innocent caterpillar going down a slide that is unaware of the patient frog at the end. The tan renga is simple and enjoyable to read. Austin I liked this tan renga because it was so cute and it complements the haiku so well. I imagine a little frog sitting at the end of the blue slide, his eyes bulging. He is waiting to eat the little caterpillar that is sliding down so runs his long tongue across his lips and tries to get in position. I like how he writes that it is watching carefully, like it needs to get this exactly right or the little caterpillar will get away from him. Trey |
they gossip and laugh it's not halloween, by Trey DeLuna & Lane Casper I like the progression from the original three lines to the following two because the first one eludes to the backstabbing that is happening, while the second come right out and call the people out for their fakeness. I like that they are clearly written by two people, one person wants to be subtle and the other author wants to come right out and say it. Maddy |
waterpark in winter angels in the snow by Lane Casper & Mia Klek |
whip cream tower mother pours the apple cider by Austin Taylor & Georgia Martindale |
scratching her head she makes shadow puppets by Madeline Delano & Kalli Farmer
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sea shells we laugh by Mackenzie Martin |
skipping stones I throw another by Maya Dougherty & Lane Casper I really like this one because of where the second half of the haiku takes the first half. The first three lines has been one of my favorites since the matching contest. In this haiku, I always thought of it as a peaceful day, with someone trying to take their mind off of all the chaos going on in the outside world. I think of this person by themselves and they are counting the ripples out loud as a way of calming him or herself down. But when the next two lines are introduced, it takes my breath away thinking that this person is trying to stop or delay time for some reasons. All of these stories pop into my head on what this person could be going through. Maybe this person stopped by here on his or her way to meet up with their significant other and she anticipates a break up. Or maybe this person has a parental figure that they are taking a break from being with at the hospital, trying to make peace with saying their final goodbyes soon. It’s a very well written collaboration for sure. Mia |
slow afternoon crumbs on the ground by Mackenzie Martin & Alex Herrera slow afternoon missing grandma by his side by Mackenzie Martin & Austin Taylor slow afternoon a young girl murmurs by Mackenzie Martin & Maya Dougherty I liked this haiku to begin with, because I wrote the first half. But what I really like was where Maya ended up taking my haiku. She took it in an entirely different direction than I imagined, which was two people walking through the park who are truly in love. It was cute; and furthermore, I liked how she italicized her two lines and made a clear distinction between hers and mine. Mackenzie |
taking a stroll Santa exclaims by Madeline Delano & Mackenzie Martin on a walk alone again by Benjamin Maynard & Lucas Chatterton Thanksgiving prayer That doesn't mean by Kalli Farmer & Alex Pratt |
thinking of how far the shoe laces by Austin Taylor & Kalli Farmer thinking of how far thumbs high in the air by Austin Taylor & Mackenzie Martin thinking of how far learning to let go by Austin Taylor & Lane Casper thinking of how far i pack them up in storage by Austin Taylor & Maya Dougherty |
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