Haiku Attempts Seeking Responses & Editing Suggestions

English 340—Set 2, Summer 2002


after the thunderstorm
sidewalk puddles lure
worms and small children

or

after the thunderstorm
children hunched over
worms in the puddle


around a bonfire
friends gather
beers raised in celebration

or

friends gather
around a bonfire
the beer cheer

Shelley Mauer


stomped mulberry fruits
robin's egg blue juicy spurts
polka-dotted porch

or

mulberries stain
the polka-dotted porch
her dress shoes

Heather Aymer


weightless now
hunkered shoulders clomping feet
fireflies zipping light

or

clomping home
from a long day's work

ah, fireflies

Heather Aymer


huge broccoli
hills covered in trees
transformed by the children's imagination

or

huge broccoli
hills covered in trees
the child's imagination

Shelley Mauer


early summer
the mayflowers redden
beneath the strengthened sun

or

the mayflowers redden
beneath the strenghened sun
early summer

Cindy


summer coming
the farmer’s children
taste their first sweat

or

summer chores
the farmer's children
taste their first sweat

Bob Reed


saturday morning
the lawn mower
becomes the alarm clock

or

her lawn mower
my alarm clock . . .
Saturday morning

Shelley Mauer


small boy with so much anger
and sadness in his eyes
his loved ones stand behind

Jonathon Obermier

 


fish and sewer smells
rivers in the shoe closet
no basketball

or

floodwater
in the shoe closet
the smell of fish and sewer

Heather Aymer


© 2002, Randy Brooks • Millikin University
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