the song that played
as you walked
away for the last time
and your smile
forever in my mind

rearrange the furniture?

the song that played
and your smile
forever in my mind
as you walked away
for the last time

forever in my mind
your smile
and the song that played
as you walked
away for the last time

i hear the song that played
when you walked away
for the last time.
your smile
forever in my mind.

as you walked--
your theme song
played with each step
that smile . . .
I will never forget

you were quiet
i didn't understand . . .
sadly,
i gave myself away
to someone else

almost all voice?
need an image?

addressing your save the date
i still hate you
for letting me
give myself away
to someone else

you were quiet
i didn't understand . . .
i gave myself away
to someone else
despite the pain

blanks eyes, closed mouth
cold heart, no feeling
sadly,
I gave myself away
to someone else

A love affair
In the Garden of Eden.
Petals after petals--
Fall
Only thorns remain.

too many breaks
(smooth last 3 lines into 1 phrase?)

petals rain down
in the Garden of Eden
their adulterous love trapped
beneath a blanket of
thorns

a love affair--
Petals after petals fall
Edens garden
Nurtures
Nothing but thorns

a love affair
in the Garden of Eden:
petal after petal falls,
leaving only
thorns

puddles of summer moonlight . . .
I embrace you beneath the watching eyes
                                     of the forest,
              drink the magick from your lips
              and hope autumn never comes

so good, but do we need so much?

puddles of summer moonlight . . .
beneath the forest's eyes
we embrace
to drink magic from lips
and pray autumn away

puddles of summer moonlight
we embrace beneath
the eyes of the forest,
I drink magic from your lips
and hope autumn never comes

Pillows
welcome
the weary heads
from long days
thank you

so many plurals?

the soft pillow
welcomes
my weary head,
saves me from this long day.
thank you

your watch
abandoned on the table
gently ticking
I sit up listening with a glass of
wine on our anniversary

edit slightly, careful because this one is sooooo close

I listen with a glass of wine
to your watch
abandoned on the table
gently ticking
happy anniversary darling

your watch
abandoned on the table
gently ticking--
I sit up listening with a glass of wine
on our anniversary . . .