Haiku Kukai 05 Favorites
Global Haiku • Millikin University • Fall 2022
1 brush strokes Femke Stuut I love the disconnect between the writer / narrator and the subject matter. The brushing is the sole focus of the haiku, allowing the reader to really narrow in on the sensory experience it takes you on: the feeling of a brush in your hair, the sound of it running through the tangles, the warmth of perhaps another person helping in the task. Page Shields, Fall 2022 I enjoy this haiku because its content is surprising. I initially assumed that the haiku would be about painting or art due to the word choice in the first line, but I like the unexpected direction in which the author takes the rest of the poem. The unanticipated description makes this haiku very interesting and unique. Olivia Swords, Fall 2022 |
2 blank page Page Shields |
3 blue light Page Shields |
4 chasing tadpoles Page Shields |
5 the fishermen |
6 a warm throw Mikayla Craw |
7 leaves float through the sky |
8 butterflies in love Femke Stuut |
9 opening the window Femke Stuut |
10 filled to the brim |
11 ink lines |
12 a breeze singing Aiden Etchason |
13 drops of rain |
14 yesterday’s artwork |
15 droplets smear Olivia Swords |
16 sharp whistle |
17 typing away McKenzie Greene I loved the sudden, drop-off-like ending. I know, personally, that my writing is quite literally my entire life, and too many times to count has coffee or tea or some unruly pet got the better of it. It kind of breaks you in a way you can’t articulate. It's a part of you that you will never get back, part of the way you saw or responded to the world, to a moment in time. Maddy Cummins, Fall 2022 |
18 carrots crunching loudly Olivia Swords |
19 the chair Aiden Etchason |
20 on the walk |
21 fingers gloss over keys Maddy Cummins I like this haiku because it gives me a spooky vibe. It makes me think that someone sits down at the piano, and hovers their hands over the keys. They might even slightly press them down, creating a soft tone. The person reminisces on someone who is gone or a happier time. Mikayla Craw, Fall 2022 |
22 dampened sidewalk Maddy Cummins I don't remember talking about this one in class, but I actually really enjoy it. It is a simple one, which goes along with the chapter I think. I also love this one because it was just last week when I saw this one in real life. The leaves had mostly fallen off the tree by my dorm, and it had been raining. Every inch of the ground was covered in wet, colorful leaves. It was so beautiful and this haiku reminded me of it right away. McKenzie Greene, Fall 2022 |
23 stiletto footprints in the snow Page Shields I imagine a scene where perhaps a woman with stiletto's went out that previous night and is now going to her job, seeing the marks she left from the fun night in the snow, and remembering the good time she had hours earlier. I love the idea of footprints or marks being left in the snow. They hold so many memories and stories. Femke Stuut, Fall 2022 |
24 sunshine wakes me up Femke Stuut I like this haiku because it's so relatable. The sleep/crud that we wake up with every day is the nasty part of sleep, however, it usually is related to a nice night of sleep. I like the part about sunshine waking you up. To me, this makes me think that there was no alarm or need to wake up early. I like the visual of waking up to a nice, sunny day and having absolutely nothing to do except relax. Aiden Etchason, Fall 2022 |
25 yellowed laces Maddy Cummins |
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31 the echos of laughs I like this version of the haiku because it gives a different meaning than the second one. Like I mentioned before, this one is spookier, when compared to the second one. I like that at the last line the writer surprises you that no one is around even though you hear echoing. Mikayla Craw, Fall 2022 or no one around no one around McKenzie Greene |
32 the black cat Or a witch’s shriek a witch’s shriek Mikayla Craw |
33 the bird or the bird Femke Stuut |
34 ritardando –or– warm ritardando warm ritardando I particularly enjoy this haiku due to my experience as a violinist for the past 15 years. I enjoy the interweaving of musical terminology and description throughout this haiku, as well as the use of the adjective “warm” to describe the ritardando. The imagery of this haiku creates a very bright and pleasing scene that resonates with me as a musician. Olivia Swords, Fall 2022 Maddy Cummins |
35 raindrop grows or swelling with silver light or holding on to silver light Randy Brooks |
36 Jack-o-lanterns aglow Jack-o-lanterns aglow Jack-o-lanterns aglow Mikayla Craw |
37 drip drop or silence interrupted silence McKenzie Greene |
38 clowns and witches Or clowns and witches clowns and witches I really like this haiku, especially the use of the word dive. It creates a funny picture of a couple of clowns and witches just plunging into the candy as if the bowl is big enough to do that. It adds to the madness of Hallioween. I also love the use of All Hallow's Eve instead of Halloween. It creates a more fancy version of the holiday I think. Femke Stuut, Fall 2022 Mikayla Craw
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39 how cold This haiku was very simple, yet memorable. It gives personality to this old tree, and thinks about it from a perspective apart from nature and its typical habitat. More emotional and human, which was very unique! Maddy Cummins, Fall 2022 or how cold Femke Stuut |
40 middle of the lake or ants up and down the rope no longer tied to the dock Randy Brooks |
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